1.) Opening Scene:
-It’s a Wednesday night around 10:00 and Dillon Gentekos locks up his friend’s bike outside of Tener Hall and goes inside
-The next day Dillon gets a text from his friend saying he can’t find his bike.
-“Please tell me you didn’t lock it through the wheel.”
-“Ok, I’ll look around some more.”
- The bike is gone and all that is left behind is the bike lock
2.) “It really ruined his day. It really ruined my day because now I owe him 300 bucks.”
3.) Nut Graph:
- I am writing about crime and safety at East Halls. I chose this issue because it is something that affects everyone at Penn State and is a serious issue for students and Penn State administration.
- My audience should care about this issue because it is something that they see and have to deal with every day.
- Recently there have been multiple reports of theft and indecent exposure in East residence halls, so it is an issue that is very relevant.
- “The Penn State Police Department will increase police officer and student auxiliary officer patrols on campus in response to a string of indecent exposure incidents reported in the residence halls.”
4.) Background:
- Safety has been a concern for the school for many years.
- “Safety on campus is one of the highest concerns.” – Graham Spanier
- The school has put much effort into safety measures, such as I.D. cards, lockdowns of residence halls, room keys, police patrols, lighting up walkways at night, and education programs.
- “Before the 24-hour lockdowns on residence halls and I.D. cards, the male resident halls were never locked.” – Officer Frank Ball of the Penn State Police Department (25 years at Penn State)
- “Bands of thieves would go around the residence halls and push on the doors. If they opened and no one was there, they would take anything they wanted.”
- I can use specific statistics about crime on campus to show how often crimes are reported.
5.) Common Crimes on Campus:
- Theft, alcohol laws, and drug laws are the biggest reported crimes on campus.
- Two burglaries have already been reported in East Halls this year.
- Bike thefts have greatly increased recently
- “Bike theft, for some reason, has been huge in the past year. The numbers of bikes reported stolen have skyrocketed.” – Officer Ball
6.) Crime and Safety in East Halls:
- “I think East Halls are generally pretty safe, there really isn’t that much crime. I mean, there’s always something going on, but never really anything major.” – Ryan Blatz, 4th year student, RA at Pennypacker Hall
- “Not really. Actually, East is less safe than the other resident halls because of all of the freshman here that are more likely to commit crimes than other students.” – Ryan
- East Halls are actually “the biggest area of concern” for the campus police. Most police calls come from east.
- Most people on campus in one area, more freshman – “new people”
-Use statistics about crime: how they have increased or decreased over years and how they compare to other places on campus.
7.) Safety Measures/ Crime Prevention:
- I.D. card system used to get into residence halls.
- “It works very well and has helped in a lot of ways.” – Officer Ball
- Piggybacking – someone letting into a residence hall behind them, whether they live in that residence hall or not – allows for anyone to get into a protected residence hall
- “It is a big problem. It’s just so natural do and so easy.” – Officer Ball
- Locking room doors can prevent a lot of crime such as theft.
- Logan, 1st year student left room unlocked by accident and roommate got mad: “He got really upset about it.”
- Lighted walkways are very important at night.
- Emergency phones are actually being taken out because of cell phones and cell phone tracking
- Crime prevention education programs are available from the campus police
-Ways to prevent crime: “Always lock your doors, even if you’re just going to the bathroom. Never leave your things behind and watch your alcohol consumption.” – Officer Ball
8.) Conclusion:
- Safety is a big issue at Penn State for both students and the school.
- Much can be done to prevent crime by students, faculty, and the police
- More things are being done to help prevent crime in the future, such as new safety measures like increased police patrols and more security cameras
Steven:
ReplyDeleteI think your paper is super well-organized and I love that you are starting with Dillon! Nice.
My only concern is that you are saying to disparate things and not connecting the two to say what it ALL MEANS. 1. You say that PSU does a lot to keep students in East safe. 2. You say that there has been a rise in crime at East.
How do you connect these two ideas?
Think of how they relate and what this equation means. For example, you may want to say that "Despite PSU's efforts to keep East safe, crime appears to be on the rise in the freshman residence halls." You see? The link is very easy to make with just a bit of language.